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Original: 11/13/2008 8:59 PM
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Thursday, November 13, 2008

 

I apologize to all for my hiatus. Hah. First I had camp and I forgot to mention it before I went; when I realized I've forgotten it was already too late. I laugh at my stupidity and forgetfulness. Then, when I got back, there was so much homework I had to do, and essays to write...argh. Life and its events can be crushing sometimes.

Anywayz, I'm in the writing club in school, and our homework last week was to write at least 2 "100 Words" pieces, and, being this natural procrastinator I am, I left the work to the last days. What I didn't expect was that the teacher (who was our English teacher) called it "devastating." I think it was his way of saying it's good, cuz that's what he also said. I'm not sure how it's really like, so here they are for your scrutiny:

1: "Selective Recall"

In the dying sunlight of dusk, Cheyenne walked across the road. There was a flash of blinding headlights. Horrified screams. Car doors slamming. Quick footsteps. On the road she laid, bleeding from a head wound, helpless, lonely. No stars but one tonight...or was that just another streetlamp? Then it blinked away; her world melted into darkness.

Days later Cheyenne woke up. Pretending to be asleep, she was listening to the doctor's whispers to a guy.

"...she remembers everything but you...the chances of recalling are slim...we'll try our best..."

He seemed devastated, his grey-eyed stare fixed on Cheyenne. She ignored him.

2. Love or Vengeance?

They gazed at each other. One vicious golden amber, one wretchedly plain brown.

"W-why are you doing this to me?"

"No choice."

Then there was dead silence.

One more down. She smirked, her tawny fox ears twitching delightedly. She'd always loved this feeling of control, of revenge. Swishing her furry russet tail, she ducked away into the night, away to Empress to report elatedly.

Years later. She married a guy who knew nothing. She didn't care. All she cared was to satisfy that yearning within, to revenge for her mother's untimely death.

Yet she didn't know she was already lost.

100 Words is basically an exercise where you have to write a story with exactly 100 words. It might sound pretty easy, but, well, in reality it isn't. It took me quite a while to write those (even if they may not look that way).

In the second story, in the opening lines it said "one vicious golden amber, one wretchedly plain brown." Actually what I wanted to say was that one's eyes were golden, and the other's were brown, but since I was editing my story to cut it to 100 words, I rewrote my first sentence from "They gazed into each other's eyes" to "They gazed at each other." How idiotic was I. But I guess the mistake worked as well, cuz I describe one as "tawny" and "russet," which are yellowish colors. So it would work as the golden one. lol.

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I really like the first one even though it's so sad.
Posted 11/13/2008 9:57 PM by MELANiE_0310 - reply

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You've done well with your assignment. It's not easy to tell a story concisely. I'd love to see you expand on either of these.
Posted 11/14/2008 9:38 AM by jacksoncroons Xanga True Member Xanga Premium Member - reply

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@MELANiE_0310 - Glad to hear someone out there enjoyed my crap. :D

@jacksoncroons -  Thank you for the praise! I like writing, so...I guess I'll try and do so. :)

Posted 11/14/2008 3:53 PM by bloodxalibi - reply


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